Altamira

He tore at the mammoth meat
his reward, the best fleshy parts
for he was still the bravest, the lead hunter

He poked at the remains in the fire pit
stabbed, cut, and doled generous portions
to the elders, the women, children

The fire was dying
it was cold in the cave
the others closed in, looking to him for answers

If the weather was bad
there would be no hunting tomorrow
he motioned to the woman to wrap the carcass in skins

He must kill, get more meat
But his limbs and back ached
he would soon be an elder

Useful for nothing but painting
the saber-toothed one on cave walls
with twig, berry juice…and blood

He must soon train the boy
The girl would go with her mother
gathering grains, leaves, seeds

Herbs to ease his aches
the malignant pains of the old, that often would not heal
he would need to cull, kill and bury

If it stormed tomorrow
he would do cave-time, crafting new weapons
he must find that boar, its meat, its skins

The clan shivered in cold and fright
at the torrential rain, the angry thunder
the lone baying wolf

He waited until the wolf stopped
then answered with his own percussive moon song
striking rock with stones and sticks

The distant wolf heard and answered
A prehistoric fugue
a cacophony of beginnings

No past
the future – only the next dawn
the next meat capture

Their comforts, their joys
wrapped in a few skins, cave paintings
lust, meat cravings, no pain

Their hopes, their survival resting in
the strength of muscled youth
standing a little straighter, a little taller

Flinty-eyed, sinewed sapling boy
perfect, waiting to use
the elder’s axe, the spear

Impatient
to conquer
bear, boar, bronze and stone

The brave hunter stared at the youth
with hope and growing
fear.

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36 Responses to Altamira

  1. dreamersteve says:

    “No past
    the future only the next dawn
    the next meat capture” makes me never want to return to that..I’d probably end up taking out the garbage there too and the bathroom must be a trip…Good piece well thought out..with turns of phrases like above..keep your interest as you take the trip..

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      hahahahahahaha! That’s a real Steve remark…about the bathroom and taking out the garbage…I can see that! Thanks for stopping by Steve, and for the comment!

  2. John Ross Barnes says:

    This is fun and sad (for Middle Aged Guys such as I ) but at the same time speaks to an “It is what it is” kind of existence – beyond the constant second guessing so many of us(I) fall prey to – and very well done. A great Story-Poem.

    Thanks for writing and sharing this, Jaquelin

  3. jmbhatt says:

    Once again; effortlessly, you take us back, to dimly lit caves and days of hunger. Amongst the hunter who slowly fears loosing ground, and to that glint in hungry eyes!!! And of course the cave paintings…..but not without “The brave hunter looked at the youth/ with hope and growing/
    fear.” Thanks for journey to B.C……how have you named your time machine?

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      Hi, J! So pleased you enjoyed the journey back in time! How about naming the time machine “The JMBhatt Special Silver Bullet” in honor of my faithful follower? LoL! Thank you so much, Jyoti for your read and comment. #hugsandgratitude

  4. brian miller says:

    a few thoughts….first i find it comforting that he has some of the same fears for the next gen as we have…and then next is how far we have come….but in that, what have we lost….can we still provide in such a way if we need and have we taught ours the skills to be able to do the same?

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      Hi, Brian! What provoking questions you ask! Indeed, what do we learn from history? And if we are the stewards of this planet and our progeny, can we teach values that will ensure not only survival, but enriched, productive lives? In gaining so much through the centuries, what have we lost? All meaningful questions…I wish I had the answers. Thank you so much for your sensitive read and comments, Bri. Much gratitude!

  5. libithina says:

    the others closed in, looking to him for answers’ – the responsibilities on his shoulders, to provide and protect – knowing that to survive he must pass on his skills to the next generation – a real hint of fear of his own mortality and his inability to be able to continue to do what he does now, as real aches come through age – his ability to know the language of the wolf ‘He waited until the wolf stopped then answered with his own percussive moon song’ the value of his experience not easily learnt and the worrry of whether he can pass it on – for survival – Even as I’m writing there is more springing to my mind as this wonderful write provokes so much thought but this comment would end up a young essay :) – but all the same concerns from then to now – Brilliant Jacquie as ever – ((((((((((((((hugs)))))))))))) Lib

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      Hi, Lib! Well, you certainly got alot out of “Altamira”…and yes, I meant for it to be provoking. Do we learn anything from history? Have we changed at all? I don’t have the answers…only questions. I do so appreciate your thorough read of this piece, Lib. You are always so attentive, and very generous in your comments, and I’m most grateful for that and for your support, always! Thank you, dear Lib! Big lovesplats and hugs :) )))) xoxoxo

  6. claudia says:

    love how you draw his character here..the situation… the still being responsible and in charge but the knowing also that things are about to change…the privileges and also expectations that lie heavy on his shoulders.. great write jackie

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      Hi, Claudia! So glad you like this piece, and feel the heavy load on this ancient’s back and shoulders as I did and still do. Can’t imagine the hardships of these people in those times…yet here we are after climbing the backs of his people and generations after. Thanks so much for the read and comment!

  7. Must give much credit on the original idea. Using prehistory as the metaphor? That’s a stroke of genius.

    Really, I’m in awe right here. So outta left field. I wish I’d thought of it.

  8. 1emeraldcity says:

    Hi, Sky! Yeah, it is kinda outa left field…but this is what happens when you watch alot of PBS documentaries…they got me at the right time, right mood…and there I was back in the cave! Thanks much for the visit and the comment:))

  9. hedgewitch says:

    There’s a whole novel in this one, jackie–spellbinding from beginning to end. I love historical fiction and anthropological stuff like this–very well written, as well–the sense of tension, fear, difficulty, all strongly conveyed. Enjoyed it much.

  10. 1emeraldcity says:

    Thanks to the inspiring novels of Jane Aeul i.e. “Clan of the Cave Bear” and exposure to many documentaries re prehistoric times, the cave paintings of Altamira and those in France, my pen and I simply could not resist this piece. Pleased you enjoyed this narrative poem, and thank you so much, Hedge, for the comment and support :) )

  11. joanbarrettroberts says:

    A great read and story — your poetry is excellent and as always I enjoy reading your words.
    Your word selections are super — “bravest.. carcass.. malignant..” — portrays power and strength.
    I love this phrase –”percussive moon song” –
    Amazingly you capture a scene in history gone by and place us into their immediate home life and daily survival! Eternal struggle of making it in this world — food, shelter, protection, song and knowledge to carry on! Thanks!

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      Wow! Joanie! What a super reaction and comment to this piece..I’m floored…but oh so pleased you like this narrative poem. Thanks so much for your wonderful comment and support!

  12. Louise says:

    Ah, I read that book & loved it! So amazing how we progressed….often wonder if we’ll last or if our planet will…fascinating write, Jacquie & much enjoyed :)

  13. 1emeraldcity says:

    Hi, L! Wouldn’t you like to be a fly on the wall and see what happens to us centuries from now? Or the cockroach? It’s said they will be here long after we’re gone! *the meek shall inherit the earth* Woooooooo! Thanks so much, Louise, for the read and comment!

  14. ayala says:

    Great storytelling…and we have progressed….makes me wonder what is in store for future generations. :) Nice piece!

  15. 1emeraldcity says:

    Hi there! Yup, we have progressed in many ways…but the same ancient fears are still with us, methinks. Thanks much for the visit, read and comment. Glad you liked it :) )

  16. Enjoyed the story ~ I specially like how he made his own moon song with the wolf as if they are both one in nature. The passing on the legacy to the next generation is always one of excitement and fear. Hopefully the young will safekeep their history and treasure the legacy ~

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      Hello, Heaven! So pleased you enjoyed this piece. You certainly got the point…and I thank you for your thoughtful read and comment! I will read your entry tomorrow, for sure and comment. :) ) xo

  17. marousia says:

    Love this – you delved right to heart of life – “only the next dawn and the next meat capture”. The final stanza blew me away – the hopes and fears we have looking at the next generation – I love the way you nailed the connections to other sentient beings like wolves because when it comes down to it we aren’t so very different :)

    • 1emeraldcity says:

      Ooooooo! You see so much here! Yes! That last stanza has much meaning for me and you got it! So many ways to fear the next generation! As for the wolf and sentient beings…you are so right…and also I think man had more respect for other species back then than we do now. Thank you so much for seeing all this, for the very sensitive read and comment! :) )) xo

  18. Man likely hasn’t changed much, by the universal clock he is still young if indeed a vast clan now. The programming that made him “become” is still in place, some of it need to be shunned as technology races past biology. But the DNA ties us to love, fear, need, sex, thrill, adventure, and survival. All ingredients you so vibrantly unfold in this fine work. Well done!

  19. lucychili says:

    extremity, survival, family, time

  20. kolembo says:

    Super! I’m going to dream on this – conjure up new worlds, on new planets, and breath them onto cave walls!

  21. I read The Clan of the Cave Bear series when I was a teenager. This reminded me of that only bleaker. Nice look inside the caveman’s brain and his need to live in the moment and never looking beyond the next hunt.

  22. two hunters
    the man and the wolf
    providing the lifeblood
    sustaining the future
    walking the same path
    of understanding and respect
    …………………………………….
    i remember those days well
    when i was married –
    such a hunter
    and always listening
    to the song of the wolf
    so very close

  23. 1emeraldcity says:

    Thank you for your read and thoughtful comment!

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